Global warming has been more and more serious over the past few years. In face, it has become such an important issue that we can’t ignore it any more. There are a number of consequences of global warming. First of all, with the temperature increasing, many crops will not grow then lots of people and animals will have no food to eat. It will surely lead to species extinction. Besides, the warming atmosphere may give rise to changes in the amount and pattern of precipitation, which will lead to great climate changes. Also, the glaciers retreating will cause the sea level rise. It will make all creatures have no places to live. Most important of all, it will also induce much damage, which will make the earth get from bad to worse. With more and more droughts and melting glaciers, I think it is time for us to take some preventing action for the earth.
1)In face要改成fact XD
回覆刪除2)many crops will not grow then lots of people and animals will have no food to eat裡面的then怪怪的耶，是要說植物不會生長所以人和動物沒有東西吃嘛?
cause the sea level rise
回覆刪除-->cause the sea level to rise
大致上很通順:)
In face(fact,你是太想要miniface喔?!)
回覆刪除In face→In fact
回覆刪除倒數第三行最後to live→to live in
In face 要改 In fact
回覆刪除may give rise 是不是連用2個動詞阿?
changes這裡需要加s嗎? 是要當名詞用嗎?還是動詞?
in fact拼錯
回覆刪除還有第4行then不是連接詞
*In face→In fact
回覆刪除* First of all, with the temperature increasing, many crops will not grow then lots of people and animals will have no food to eat. then不是連接詞唷!所以你前面要再加上and!
* I think it is time for us to take some preventing action for the earth.
→I think it is time for us to commit ouselves to earth prevention.(參考看看)