2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing an Opinon(1)

In recent years, many people talk about the death penalty, do you agree with it?
In my opinion, I think the death penalty is in need of existing because of several reasons below. First, if there is no death penalty, people may think that they can kill anyone who they hate or at random. It will surely cause the world in a state of chaos.Second, it's really unfair for those who are killed. Although, the Human Rights organization insist that no one can convict the criminals to death because they have their human rights, I think they must not consider that when the criminals kill others, have they thought of others' human rights? I believe that the answer is no for the reason that if they have, then they should not kill other people. Third, if the murderer lives in prison instead of being sentenced to death, he/she will waste lots of national resources. As the number of murderers increasing, they will cause a big financial problem for a country. Taking into account all of these points, it should be clear that the death penalty is necessary.

5 則留言:

  1. people may think that they can kill anyone who they hate or at random.(他們可以殺任何他們討厭的人或隨意地!??,翻譯起來怪怪的)

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  2. Human Rights organization insist 動詞要單數唷!
    As the number of murderers increasing
    ->With the number of murders increasing
    或As the number of murders increases
    很多句型用得很棒呢~~~

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  3. First, if there is no death penalty, people may think that they can kill anyone who they hate or at random.
    他們雖然不會被判死刑,但也會被關在牢裡阿!還是不能隨便殺人吧!這個論點怪怪的~
    我喜歡妳的開頭~很多地方都用得很不錯喔!讚!!!!!!

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  4. * if the murderer lives in prison~ "住"在監獄裡??我是覺得有點怪...把live換成is會不會比較好ㄚ?
    *~that they can kill anyone who they hate or at random.這句話第一次看會覺得怪怪的,我覺得到anyone就可以了!

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  5. 開頭要空格唷~!!
    第一句是不是該有連接詞or分開寫呢?

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