Excuse me, could you do me a favor to look for my friend? Thirsty minutes ago, we were shopping toghther, but now we get apart. Her name is Eva. There are some features of hers below. She is seventeen years old and wears glasses. Besides she is about one hundred and sixty centimeters height and fifty kilometers weight. Moreover, she has small eyes and shoulder-length hair. In the last time I saw her, she was wearing a green dress and a red spike heels. Especially, you can recognize her immediately from her nose. Because people here all have straight nose but she doesn’t. If you see her, please make contact with me or tell her to come to Dubai Hotel as soon as possible because we will leave here tomorrow morning. Thanks for you aid.
Thirsty多了一個s唷!!
回覆刪除1)please help me to find her. help後面不用to直接原型動詞哦
回覆刪除對了height和weight前面應該要加in~
回覆刪除Thirsty XDD(thirty)
回覆刪除There are some features of hers below(her多了s)
Besides 是不是要加逗號阿
she was wearing a green dress and a red spike heels. (要不要就直接用she wore阿)
sixty centimeters height 應該要把height改成tall
回覆刪除開頭thirty minutes
回覆刪除besides+逗號~
最後一句"your" aid
In the last time I saw her, she was wearing a green dress and a red spike heels. 直接寫她穿什麼~用現在式就可以了~
回覆刪除Thirsty 應該是thirty
回覆刪除In the last time I saw her
in可以拿掉
是不是要寫一下妳的聯絡方式?
1,是thirty
回覆刪除2.是the last time 去掉in
3.Especially, you can recognize her immediately from her nose.Because people here all have straight nose but she doesn’t.
可以改成以下方式
→Especially,~nose because~ doesn't.
→Especially,~nose. It's because~ doesn't.
另外，我覺得也可以改成
→Especially,~nose. It's because people here~nose except her. 用except!!
4.Thanks for "your" aid.
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