2011年4月27日 星期三

Comparing - 2

John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are both important for the American, and they were similar in many ways.  First of all, John Adams was once the president of United States and so was Thomas Jefferson and they were the signers of Declaration of Independence. Besides, both of them were delegate to the Continental Congress and they studied laws. In addition, John Adams was a crucial person in the American Revolution. Similarly, Thomas Jefferson played a crucial role in the American Revolution. Finally, both of them died on July 4, 1826.

7 則留言:

  1. delegrate要加d
    其他沒什麼問題囉~

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  2. delegrate要加d!
    沒什麼問題:)

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  3. 第一句要不要都改成過去式阿
    其他應該沒什麼問題

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  4. 我覺得應該是去掉were 留下delegate要加d →過去式
    另外,crucial重複用了兩次,看你要不要改同義字important或significant
    然後阿~時態要一致and加上結論句唷!

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